Workshop #2 for K.JOHNSON

Thesis:
1. Restate the thesis in your own words. If the thesis is a question and not an assertion, make it an assertion. If the claim is a fact vs an opinion, then tell the author that s/he needs to make the claim an opinion as we cannot argue facts. Make sure the words “although” and “because” are in it. Are there 3 reasons in the because clause?

Although organizations are making it a point to lower air pollutants, levels f pollutants in the air, such as PM and ozone, are much too great, this mainly causes

damage to children because of the high exposure, weak immune systems and physical development.

5. Is the thesis the final sentence of the first paragraph? Is it underlined or bolded?

Yes.

Audience:
Who is the author’s audience? Will the audience already agree with the author, or is the author writing to the opposition? How can you tell? Give specific examples.

The audience is generally everyone. The author seeks to persuade the reader that there is a problem.

Counterargument:
List the counterarguments (arguments of the author’s oppositions) used in the paper (there should be at least three). Does the author adequately address these arguments? Do you think there are other arguments that could be addressed? Do you see any logical fallacies?

1. There is no solid evidence
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Title:
Does the paper have an interesting title? If not, help author come up with one.

Yes

Introduction:
Is there a catchy lead sentence? What is it? If there isn’t one, what would you suggest?

Yes

Conclusion:
How does the author conclude the paper? What do you think of it?

I think the author concludes the paper in a very final way, but she also restates her thesis in a new way.

Flow/Transitions:
Does each paragraph expand upon the thesis? Do the paragraphs flow? Which paragraphs have bumpy transitions?

Nice transitions.

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