ProctorSimone Workshop Book Review Essay

Workshop Questions
Thesis:

1. The thesis states how the fast food industry is effecting various factor’s in American’s lives. The thesis looks like it’s good to go.
4. The book title is given in the thesis and the author agrees with the points of the book.
5. The thesis is bolded.

Audience:
I believe the audience (this class) will agree with the author. We’ve been learning a lot about this food phenomenon going on in our nation. Personally, I agree so much that this is the topic of my research paper.

Counterargument:
I don’t see any counterarguments addressed other than in the thesis it states fast food is commericialized, but this is not addressed anywhere else in the essay.

Title:
I think the title is very interesting and catchy–great job.

Introduction:
The lead sentence is catchy. It makes a great point to start with.

Conclusion:
The conclusion could use some work. It should summarize the main points of the paper. Also, turning your last sentence into a statement rather than a question would probably make more of an impact.
Flow/Transitions:
The paragraphs flow fairly well. They are a little unorganized, but I am still able to tell what the main point of each is.

Extra:
Don’t start any sentences with “but” or “or.” There is one sentence in the third paragraph that is a statement, but it is puctuated with a question mark. Also, there may be a few too many questions in here. They can make big impacts, but too many can be distracting. I would ask Prof. Sullivan about that.
Overall, I get the main points you’re trying to make. This topic is very important, so you chose a good one!

kathrynjohnson114 Workshop Book Review Essay

Workshop Questions:
1. Thesis is good to go on all of these points.
4. The thesis does give the title of the book along with an opinion of it.
5. It is the last sentence of the first paragraph and bolded.
Audience:
The audience (this class) will most likely agree with the author. I believe he’s arguing the more widely accepted viewpoint.
Counterargument:
The counterargument I see is the one listed in the thesis that populations are growing. No other counterarguments are clearly stated throughout.

Title:
The title is okay.
Introduction:
The two intro sentences are appealing and caught my attention.
Conclusion:
I like the conclusion because it encourages the reader of this paper to go back and read the book for themself. I did not think of this for my book review essay, but it makes perfect sense to put in a review.
Flow/Transitions:
The paragraphs flowed from one to the next and explained the thesis points.
Extra:
A couple of grammar issues: All numbers under 100 should be spelled out. Introductory phrases in sentences should be followed with commas.
Also, a couple more examples from the book might help further your ideas.
Overall, great review. I get the idea of the book and it explains all of your points clearly. Good job!